Thursday, August 6, 2015

Revision Matrix


  1. Fixed grammar mistakes:
  • Reread paper and corrected all wrong spelling and punctuation. 
  • This has made my paper smoother and more creditable
  1. Changed my title:
  • My title was weak and only pertained to the class. Now the title sounds more professional and it supports my thesis in the paper. 
  1. Fixed all APA citations:
  • My paper had a number of miss or wrong citations. I have now fixed all citations in accordance to APA formatting. 
  • In doing this I no longer have to worry about plagiarism, this also helps other readers in checking my sources and makes my paper more creditable.
  1. Added a Reference page:
  • By adding a reference page i have made it easier to check sources and I'm now in APA formatting guide lines. 
  1. Cut the bullshit:
  • I have really trimmed the fat by cutting all unnecessary statements, recommended by Zack De Peiro. 
  • This has lead to a smooth paper and has gotten rid of all unwanted chatter. 
  1. Pulled more quotes from class readings, interview and artifacts
  • I have added a great number of quotes from class readings and the interview.
  • This has strengthened my paper by adding more proof of people agreeing with me and this supports my thesis. My paper is much stronger because of it.
  1. Took Zack De Peiro’s advice and chopped my paper into more manageable “bite size” paragraphs. 
  • This has made my paper smooth and easier to digest than before. It is broken up and no longer a lengthy read.  
  1. I have rid my paper of all hypotheticals and personal analogies.
  • I have change all my personal analogies into quotes from class reading and artifacts. 
  • Now I have other people supporting my idea instead just personal opinion.
  1. I broke my Paper up into 3 parts
  • My first draft was run on paragraphs with unorganized ideas.
  • My new draft is more organized and easy to fallow, less jumping around.
  1. Elaborated more on my Interviewer and his moves. 

  • I have explained more about Dave’s (Professor Schwartz) background and his moves.
  • This helps Dave get credibility from the reader and supports my thesis more.  

Wednesday, August 5, 2015

Discovering the Elements of Good Storytelling Final Draft ("the Paper")

                    Discovering the Elements of Good Storytelling
As I walked down the hall to Professor Schwartz’s office I find myself wondering how I should conduct this interview; should I be friendly or professional? As an aspiring screenplay writer, Professor Schwartz is a role model for me. He completed graduate school in Iowa and attended the best writing program in the country: Iowa’s Writer’s Workshop. Soon after, he launched a successful career as a screenplay writer, selling multiple scripts to Hollywood studios including some that were adapted to feature films. He is currently writing a book on screenplay writing titled “Screw the Pooch," a satire based on the well-known “Save the Cat”. He is happy to share his experience and acquired knowledge with the lucky few who take his class, and I am one of those. 
Before I know it I have arrived at his office and can feel my nerves begin to manifest. I have the questions I'm going to ask him, so why am I so nervous? My mind races when he greets me but fortunately, the great thing about him is that he is easy going and makes you feel comfortable. Once in his office, I express admiration for his work as a screenplay writer and explain that I’m there to learn about what makes a good story. During the interview we easily dive into conversation and after a while my tone shifts from professional to relaxed. Professor Schwartz and I veer away from structured interview questions to discuss his writing process and the fundamentals of storytelling. It wasn’t until after the interview, once I got a chance to ponder over our conversation, that I was able to identify the key elements of good storytelling that he had revealed between anecdotes: gene and rhetoric. In this paper I am going to discuss what I learned from our interview and explore the foundation to good storytelling. First I'm going to talk about genre and why it is necessary, and then about the importance of rhetoric and how it pertains to storytelling.
Genre
Before you ever start writing a story you need to know what the genre is and how to identify it. Genre is commonly defined as “A class or category of artistic endeavor having a particular form, content, technique or the like of” (dictionary.com). To better understand how this concept is applied in practice, I asked Professor Schwartz what genre means to him and how he goes about choosing a genre for this stories. Professor Schwartz explained, “Genre is the type of story you are going to tell. A genre is something that tells you what the movie is about before even seeing or reading what the story is.” Staying in the theme of films, all horror stories have the same conventions making it easier to target an audience, or if you are the audience you can easily identify a horror film if that is what you want to see. There are other ways to understand genres; Kerry Dirk suggests, “When something new happens that requires a response, someone must create that first response. Then when that situation happens again, another person uses the first response as a basis for the second, and eventually everyone who encounters this situation is basing his/her response on the previous ones, resulting in the creation of a new genre” (Dirk, 2010, p.252)  This tells us that genres form from a series of precedents that are telling of how similar future situations will be understood. “Think about genres as tools to help people to get things done” (Dirk, 2010, p.252).
So, how do you go about choosing your genre? It was a simple question for Professor Schwartz who said, “It’s easy for me to choose my genre because I don't really stray too far from what I always do. I really enjoy dramas, so I write dramas and usually ones with a female lead.” Evidently, Professor Schwartz sticks to what he knows. After reading three of his screenplays I recognized his go to’s, or ‘moves’, are drama-based narratives with a female lead with a secret. All three of his screenplays follow these ‘moves’ and they have yet to fail him. Moves make this part of the process easy for people like Professor Schwartz, not that one has to be constrained by one genre. Fierce Dolan (2012) famously says, “I write across several genres. I’m a slut for words. I can't keep it in my literary pants” (p.1). 
“It could be argued that the genre doesn't matter just as long as you pick one,” insists Professor Schwartz; “Whether it's an article, story, or student essay, you have to choose your genre, and preferably one that helps get your point across.” Genre is very important and it helps reach a target audience. If you don’t have a genre, then you can’t move onto the next step. In other words, genre is a building block in the writing process and a block the foundation for storytelling can’t do without. 
Rhetoric
Genre and Rhetoric tie closely together; you can’t do one without the other. Rhetoric is potentially the most important part of storytelling and for some people, the only thing that matters in screenplay writing. Aristotle (350 BC) writes, “It is absurd to hold that a man should be ashamed of an inability to defend himself with his limbs, but not ashamed of an inability to defend himself with speech and reason; for the use of rational speech is more distinctive of a human being than the use of his limbs” (p.1). He also argues, “Anyone can become angry — that is easy, but to be angry with the right person at the right time, and for the right purpose and in the right way — that is not within everyone’s power and that is not easy” (p.1). This is my favorite quote on rhetoric since it is simple to understand. There is a time and place for every tone, as Aristotle so cleverly put it. Professor Schwartz and I talked a long time about target audiences and rhetoric. Professor Schwartz believes that modern day storytellers and mainstream Hollywood films don't treat their audience as intelligent individuals. “Today’s films force feed material to their audience as if they can’t figure it out by themselves” (Professor Schwartz, 2015).
Professor Schwartz has been writing to the same audience for years and he know his audience, so his rhetoric is the same from story to story. I have read two of Professor Schwartz’s screenplays and, because he already knows his audience, he knows he doesn't have to spell everything out or use simple language. Instead, he gives his audience deserved-credit and trusts them to understand his story. He believes his audience appreciates that he does that. If Professor Schwartz wrote ‘on the nose dialog’ or explained every detail about the scene or story for the audience, they would be inclined to never see or read his work again. Professor Schwartz calls it ‘regurgitation over digestion’. After reading Professor Schwartz’s work, it is easy to recognize that the tone is directed to a mature audience. He serves up a platter of set ups and pay offs and prefers to suggest rather than tell. Because he knows his audience, he can do this through rhetoric. A writer who doesn’t effectively use rhetoric or know their audience is flirting with disaster. That makes rhetoric just as important as genre.
Janet Boyd (2011) agrees; “choosing how to express your meaning is every bit as important as the message itself, which is really what rhetoric is. Every time you go to write anything (and every time you open your mouth), whether actively conscious of the purpose or not, you are making decisions about which words to use and what tone to establish as you order your thoughts based upon what is appropriate for your intended audience in that context” (p.1) With this in mind, I ask what tool of rhetoric Professor Schwartz uses; “In my screen writing book I can use heavy jargon because I know my audience. My audience is writers themselves or students exposed to screenplays” (Schwartz, 2015). Boyd (2011) concurs that, “Jargon is the terminology used by those in a particular profession or group to facilitate clear and precise communication, but this rhetorical tool is not limited just to the professional world” (p89).
Conclusion
In conclusion, rhetoric and genre are the foundation to good story-telling. From stories to articles, every writer should first be a master of genre and rhetoric in order to be an effective storyteller. Kerry Dirk (2010) explains that, “It is more important to understand the word genre than just be a master of one” (p.259). As suggested by Dirk (2010), it is useful to understand genre as a whole because you can use it several different ways to help get the point of the story across or lead into an answer within the story. This applies to rhetoric as well. Before you ever sit down to start writing, one has to first understand what you are writing about. This is a crucial step in the writing process. The second step is to identify a target audience; Are they old? Are they from a different generation? Is my audience politicians or construction workers? This question is so important and some might say it is the most important step before writing. Whether you believe genre or rhetoric comes first is of no matter as long as you sit down and take the time to go over them before you write. If you don’t go through this process before writing, whether it is a narrative story or a lecture, the results could be catastrophic. Thus, genre and rhetoric are the foundation to great storytelling.
References
Aristotle (350 BCE). Rhetoric (W. Rhys Roberts, Trans.). In Daniel C. Stevenson, The Internet 
Classics Archivei. Retrieved from http://classics.mit.edu/Aristotle/rhetoric.mb.txt. 
Boyd, Janet (2011). Murder! (Rhetorically Speaking). In Charles Lowe and Pavel Zemliansky 
(Eds.), Writing Spaces: Readings on Writing
Dirk, Kerry (2010). Navigating Genres. In Charles Lowe and Pavel Zemliansky (Eds.), Writing 
Spaces: Readings on Writing
GoodReads (n.d.). “Fierce Dolan Quotes”. Retrieved from http://www.goodreads.com/quotes/
506180-i-write-across-several-genres-i-m-a-slut-for-words. 
Sok & Skriv (n.d.). “Academic Genres”. Retrieved from http://sokogskriv.no/en/reading/
academic-genres/.



Monday, July 27, 2015

Latest and greatest draft. . . So far.

The Paper
3rd Draft

As I walked down the halls to interviewers office I ask myself, I know Dave fairly well, but how should I conduct this interview? Should I be friendly? Or should I be more professional? Its to late I have arrived at Dave’s office and my nerves begin to go frantic on me. I have the questions I'm going to ask him so why am I so nervous? My mind races as I am greeted by Dave and I sit down. The great thing about Dave is that he is easy going and makes you feel comfortable, so after a while my rhetoric changes from professional to a more relaxed but professional feel. Once I was in the room we immediately started talking about stories and what he believes makes a good story. Whoa wait, how do I believe you? Why should I listen to anything this guy is say? Without asking the question I already knew the answer but I asked it any ways. “One-second Dave. Can I ask about your experience and achievements as a writer?” Dave said “ Sorry I guess I got a little ahead of myself there. Well, I went to grad school in Iowa and attended the best writing program in the country (Iowa’s Writers Workshop). Later I became a successful screen writer, I have sold many scripts to Hollywood studios and have made a feature film based off one of my screenplays and currently working on my second feature film. I am also working on my screenplay writing book which is a satire on the ever famous “Save the Cat” mine is called “Screw The Pooch” He then finished with a laugh and confesses “I think its pretty clever”. Ok wow,  now I have set up some credibility this guy is believable and a reliable source, the first part of my job is done. 
Dave and I talked about a long list of things from stories all the way to avant Agard writings and films in Europe. During this paper I struggled with what kind of argument I wanted to make about writing, but after analyzing Dave’s interview some more I realized a few things that are essential, not only to storytelling but to all writing. There are two things that are essential to writing and good writing cannot skip any of these steps, Rhetoric and genre.
Genre, before you ever start writing you need to know what the subject is and what genre you are writing about, this also helps the process out with rhetoric but I will get to that in a minute. So what is “genre”? Well, dictionary.com defines it as, “A class or category of artistic endeavor having a particular form, content, technique or the like of”. Ok, so what does that mean? Lets go back to the interview and see if Dave can explain it into a way we understand. “Dave, what is genre and how do you go about choosing what genre to write?” Dave replies “ Genre is the type of story you are going to tell. A genre is something that tells you what the movie is about before even seeing or reading what the story is.” I think of it like this, Genre is like a flavor of ice cream, you see the color and the flavor name through the window before you even purchase it right? So you see the sign and it says watermelon, black cherry. Ok, so now you have an idea of what it taste like because you have tasted watermelon and you have tasted black cherry but you have never tasted them together but you have an idea of what its going to taste like. That is like genre in a story or at the movie theater, you see horror story on the billboard, you have never seen the movie but you have some idea of what the story is about, you know that some people are going to die and there is a possibility of some sort of monster or supernatural being at work. That might be might be a weird way of explaining it but its easy for me. 
So, how do you go about choosing your genre? It was a simple question for Dave, Dave states “ Its easy for me to choose my genre because I don't really stray to far from what I always do. I really enjoy dramas so I write dramas and usually ones with a female lead.”(You could also say these are his “Moves”) So this part of the process is easy for people like Dave but you don't have to be constrained by one genre. Fierce Dolan says this “ I write across several genres. I’m a slut for words. I can't keep it in my literary pants” - Fierce Dolan, goodread.com. The genre doesn't matter just as long as you pick one. Weather it's an article, story, or student essay you have to choose your genre, preferably one that helps get your point across. Genre is very important and it helps when targeting your audience, the more the genre reaches to the reader or viewer the more relatable it feels. Choosing the genre eventually leads me to my next point, rhetoric. 
Rhetoric could be the most important part of you're writing and to some people say it's the only thing you need to worry about in you're writing. Aristotle pleads “It is absurd to hold that a man should be ashamed of an inability to defend himself with his limbs, but not ashamed of an inability to defend himself with speech and reason; for the use of rational speech is more distinctive of a human being than the use of his limbs.” The Poetics by Aristotle, Translated by Gerald F. Else. He also has another quote “Anyone can become angry - that is easy, but to be angry with the right person at the right time, and for the right purpose and in the right way - that is not within everyones power and that is not easy.” - Aristotle. I really think this explains a lot about rhetoric and if we don't take it literal we can translate it to our writing or stories. What this quote says to me is that once you find your genre that is that first step to choosing and knowing your audience (rhetoric). Again why is this important to think about your rhetoric? Because before you  start writing you have to know who your audience is, not like what they had for dinner or what kind of car they prefer those are arbitrary characteristics about your audience but rather what kind of genre your audience is. Is your audience old? Are they young? Are they intelligent? Dave has been writing to the same audience for years and he know his audience so his rhetoric is the same from writing to writing. I have read two of Dave’s screenplays and because Dave know his audience already, he know he doesn't have to spell everything out or use dumbed down language. He gives his audience some credit and know that they are smart and the audience appreciates that he does that. If Dave wrote “On the nose dialog” or explained to them every detail about the scene or story for them they would be inclined to never see or read his work again. For example, this essay here, my target audience is a Phd student and college professor. So, now I know a little about my audience, now how do I appeal to them, how do I want to connect to them? My audience is obviously well educated so I know they will want to see intelligent language, good quoting and most likely would like to see some of the material he has been teaching translated back into the students writing. A writer who doesn't believe in rhetoric or doesn't know their audience is flirting with disaster. Imagine if a Washington Post columnist is writing to a group of 4th graders but she is conducting it as if she was writing to her editor. This would never work, the children would never understand and you have miss your objective because you didn't know your audience. That is why rhetoric is just as important as genre.

In conclusion, rhetoric and genre are the foundation to every writing. From stories to articles, every writer must first be masters in genre and rhetoric. Kerry Dirk explains that “ It is more important to understand the word genre than just be a master of one” Navigating Genres. I also believe you can paraphrase this about rhetoric as well. My argument is that before you ever sit down to start writing you have to first understand what you are writing about. Like, is this a persuasive paper, is it a fairy tale, a student essay or an article going into times magazine? This is the most important thing you do in you're writing process. The second question you have to ask yourself is who is my audience, who will I be speaking to? Are they old, are they from a different generation? Is my audience politicians or construction workers? This question is so important and some might say it is the most important thing you asks yourself before writing. Weather you believe genre or rhetoric comes first, it doesn't matter as long as you sit down and take the time to go over them before you write. If you don’t go through this process before writing, weather it is a narrative story or a lecture, the results could be catastrophic, Genre and rhetoric the foundation to all outstanding writing.

Thursday, July 16, 2015

super rough draft


What do my tendencies do for me? Why do I have them? Its something that I have not noticed in the past till this class. I had no idea that the woman I love was the biggest distraction of all. I didn't know that curtain music can zone me in and others can zone me out. All in all these tendencies are a good thing, even if it prevents my productivity. Today I will determine what my “habits” or tendencies do for me, what tendencies are good and what tendencies are bad.
First lets get a better grasp on my tendencies. When I sit down to write, I need serval things. I need Music, coffee or alcohol, water, my laptop, something to snack on and my cell phone. When I write, it is a whole ordeal I guess. I have just realized my work table is a controlled chaos of papers and liquids surrounding a valuable piece of technology. I also have another tendency I do when I start writing, but this tendency is uncontrollable, it's my wife she is always close by waiting for a split second break to give me a kiss or to distract me for a second because she is bored, she it the greatest thing in my life. She is there to support me and she is my biggest fan, but when it comes to home work she is the bane of my essays life. but we will get into that later.

    So lets narrow down the good and bad for each of these tendencies. Music; music can be good for many reasons. It can relieve stress, it can help you focus by getting rid of all white noise or background noise that can be distracting. I cant tell you how annoying it is to be working hard and concentrating on you paper when, what it sounds like is a highway speed chase going on, Siren after siren rolling by all unbeknownst of the quiet student writer in his apartment. But with the power of headphones and some good jams you can block out all unwanted noise. You just have Bob Marley in your ear constantly telling you to jam on or everything is going to be all right. Unfortunately there is a down side to listening to music, their have been countless times I have broke out into song and dance when one of my favorite tracks come on. As amazing as the song is it still displaces me from my essay. This obviously wastes time and pushes back productivity, there are some was with this tendency that can work so you can have you cake and eat it to. I have found something called “Homework” music on youtube. It has no lyrics its just relaxing sounds hitting you ear drum and it can really make a difference in concentration. Another solution is classical music. Classical music can really block out the outside world and release the creative side of your brain.
Water, coffee, alcohol and snacks all have great benefits to them, mostly they prevent the young writer from getting up to do these things, their all in front of him and hopefully none of them run out till after he is done with the paper. Again, with every positive to my tendencies there is a negative. If I drink to much water I have to got to the bathroom a lot, if I eat to much I run out of snacks,Thats just for starters. Water is something that is essential to any writing because you don't feel the same when you not properly hydrated. Your writing can really suffer if you are not feeling well or at the top of you game. Food is the same way with the many benefits to eating you can find 2 negatives. You can become fat, you can get sleepy or lazy after to much food and god forbid if you get any food or drink on you beautiful Mac Book Pro. Both of these things will make me get up from productive work station and after a while of this it can really start to eat up time and when your a big procrastinator like me time is everything.

Finally to my wife, she is beautiful, kind, supportive and a great help at times. She rubs my shoulders and replaces my food, water, or coffee when I run out. She is definitely more a positive than a negative but she can push her boundaries from extremely helpful to painfully distracting. I don't mind when she distracts me because it lets me take some time to relax and not think about writing but it is the biggest time consumer of all of my tendencies combined. Sometimes she can distract me for days and thats is the definition of counterproductive. A way I have tried to fix this distraction in my writing process or in any homework process for that matter, is to let her know well before things are do that I'm going to be very busy. This gives her time to find to find activities to do while I work on my things. So instead of distracting me she has a good heads up to preoccupy herself. If I don't give her a fair warning that I'm not going to be able to play all day she will automatically assume that if i don't have class then she gets me all to herself. Another way to help is to be stern with her but I do not recommend that to anyone and it really does not go over well. Kindness and understanding go a long way, a lot longer than being stern, that just gets you in trouble.


In conclusion, all the of my tendencies I went over today, music, coffee/water, and my wife have great advantages to them but also have there disadvantages. I have learned a lot about myself through this project and i believe my work will reflect that. I have learned that I love music and it helps me concentrate on my work but it can also distract me. I found that the solution is to listen to classical music or “homework” music. I have learned that water and food are very important to any writer, but can hurt the writer as well. The solution? Its simple everyone who does this just needs to do it in small moderations to prevent bathroom breaks and fatigue. The last thing I learned during my writing adventures in the last couple of weeks is that your loved ones can be your biggest distractions but also your greatest supporters, and to prevent from breaking there plans and hearts, you can be cautious and let them know your writing schedule well in advance. 

Thursday, June 25, 2015

Interview Question

Ethan Zimmer
Zach De Piero 



Interview Questions


  1. Tell me about your past, current and future writing?
  2. What is you're writing process?
  3. How do you start building you stories? 
  4. Do you think about every word you use?
  5. What kind of writers inspire you ? 
6)   Who is your target audience?
7)   What made you want to be a writer? 
8)   Do you have styles or moves you have gone back to into each piece of writing?
9)   Do you get help from other writers? 
10) At what point to do you bring in someone to proofread or edit your work?
11) How much do you relay on advice?
12) Do you write for pleasure or for work?
13) Is your process different for a client then it is for personal stuff? 

Sunday, June 21, 2015

Rhetorical Analysis

Ethan Zimmer
Zach De Piero
June 15, 2015


Artifact Analysis 
David Roy 

I have decided to interview a somewhat successful screenplay writer and director. David Roy has written and sold many screenplays he is also working on a screenplay writing book to help young writers produce better work, so have decided to venture further into his writing and do a full analysis. 
  You first thing you have to notice is the genre. Well he doesn't write articles or informational essays, but he writes stories. He has a very Joseph Campbell approach to stories and even in his developing book about creating good stories he has written it as if it was a story itself. Stories are the corner stone of human communication sense the beginning of time. The neanderthal drew pictures on the cave wall to tell stories and thus began the humans interest of stories.  David roy has drunk the cool aid and is not shaping the Joseph Campbell approach of story telling into a way that is pushing the the story structure and hopefully shaping a new era of story telling in Hollywood. 

 I have read some passages from his book that is in development, “Screw the Pooch” a satire on the famous screenplay writing book “save the cat” and I have also read two screenplays, Mad Song and Temptation both around 120 pages long. 
When you're analyzing the works of a screenplay its a little harder to find a credibility statement, this could be a first time writer or someone with a large resume. You open page one and you jump right into the story, so credibly is hard but tone or rhetoric is easy to understand. In David Roy’s case it is incredibly easy to understand the tone of his writing, He does not write for children to say the least. He writes to make adults think of the present and to make the familiar task of life seem strange, “photogene”. He tries to  make people take there fictional blinders off and see the weird fate of the world that is in front of them. I believe his stories are mostly to educate, question, persuade and entertain all at the same time, but he is playing in a tricky world. There is a fine line between having the audience question the wonders of life or just over shooting over everyones heads. It wouldn't surprise me if a lot of people got a different reading from his writing then what he has intended, and that is the risk you take when you write open ended stories like he does. 

I think the main points in both of his screenplay were the same, they are all about making you question and that no matter how much you plan or try and prevent something you cant stop fate or that fate can be random and unexplainable. The main points or theme remind me of the film “Don't Look Now” a film about what is real and present and what is the future and a vision, but at the end of the film it kinda comes out of left field and makes you wonder why, for days on end. David Roy tries the same approach and it works in one of his screenplays, but its conveyed through a day with a stripper and a day of a priest and when there paths collide the odd reality life takes you in a turn that is thought provoking. It works very well in this screenplay but he try the same in his earlier work, before Temptation, Mad song and it kind of misses. Maybe because the context was less interesting or I wasn't the target audience. 

In conclusion David Roy’s work doesn't cater to the populous of America, he writes what he likes to see and he writes for the thinkers and the people who want to be challenged in everyday life or how they see everyday life. He is unlike the blockbuster studio cookie cutter writer you see coming out of Hollywood everyday. He is a fresh educated writer who wants to challenge the main stream and bring intelligence back to the cinema.     

Thursday, June 18, 2015

Some more solid questions

http://rhetoric.byu.edu/pedagogy/rhetorical%20analysis%20heuristic.htm